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Any grammatical errors?

In the short story “The Yellow Wallpaper”, written by Charlotte Perkin Gilman, the author utilizes many symbolic attractions to better present the themes, the subordination of women in society and the significance of self-expression. The yellow wallpaper and bars symbolizes the inferior views society has on women, whereas the journal represents the freedom one needs. Clearly, the theme is definitely the feminine insanity that was presented incorrectly by the society back in the late 1800s which, in my opinion, is a significant logical fallacy.


also, our teacher wants us to discuss theme, i dun rly understand wut she means by 'discussing"
does she want my opinion??

Don't say "in my opinon" - you're not supposed to refer to yourself.

Yes, say what you think, and give the reasons why you think that.

There are some grammatical errors, which I've fixed below. Your first sentence is a run-on, FYI, which is why I changed it as I did. I discuss a bit more at the bottom.

In the short story “The Yellow Wallpaper”, written by Charlotte Perkin Gilman, the author utilizes many symbols to better present the themes: the subordination of women in society, and the significance of self-expression. The yellow wallpaper and bars symbolize the inferior views society has about women, whereas the journal represents the freedom one needs. Clearly, the theme is the feminine insanity that was presented incorrectly by the society back in the late 1800s which, in my opinion, is a significant logical fallacy.

Okay, a few things. First, why is "feminine insanity" a logical fallacy? I think this is poor word choice. If that's what you mean, then you need to explain it further to make me agree that it's a logical fallacy.

Second, your teacher doesn't want your opinion when she says "discuss." That's just her way of saying, "make your paper about the theme of the story." She's giving you a topic here. She wants you to spend a significant amount of time giving examples of how the theme is at work in the book.

You don't actually point out clearly what you think the theme is; is it the subordination of women and the significance of self-expression, or is it feminine insanity? If the second thing isn't the main "theme" of the book, then use a different word to describe what it is.

What you should be doing is saying something like, "The main themes of this story are the subordination of women in society and the significance of self-expression. We can see examples of the first when Thomas forces his wife to make him supper even though she is sick [or whatever]. We also see it metaphorically in the use of yellow wallpaper and bars. For example, yellow wallpaper is mentioned as something that Sally hates, but which she cannot escape in her own home, in the same way that she hates Thomas but is unable to escape him because of the constraints of society [or however it functions]. The bars are symbolic of the way she feels trapped, as we see in the following passage from the story: "[quote quote quote yadda yadda yadda]."

The significance of self-expression comes out in other ways. For example [blah blah blah, stuff about the newspaper, quotes from the story, explanations of times when self-expression is important to the main character, etc]...

You get the idea. I don't know the story, but you need to tell us WHY those things you point out are related to the themes you posit in the beginning. How does the story emphasize those themes? Some ways it does so might be symbolic; other ways might be straightforward. You should talk about both. When you have really explained why you think those are the main themes of the story, then you will have "discussed" it.